This story is about my character being bored, hanging out with a friend, when said friend gets a call and leaves the room. My character decided it's an excellent opportunity for a little fun and hides all of the friend's belongings throughout the room. In the end, my character is enjoying watching the friend tear apart the room looking for her stuff from the safety of the cupboard under the sink.
I mostly utilized scene to scene and moment to moment transitions, I think...
I am wondering whether or not I should put the other character into the same style as my own, along with the setting, or if I should leave it as is. Also, I'm thinking maybe I should flip the bottom panel so that the cupboard opens on the right side? There's also the question of whether there are too many panels crammed together....
I love they way you are doing your comic, I think it is really interesting that you are choosing to only use the character type you created for your character and are doing the other characters more realistically.
ReplyDeleteAllison,
ReplyDeleteNice job with the transitions and storytelling! I think the number of panels you have is just right, and I really like how you are a devlish creature depicted in a different style. The point of view in the final frame is great with you laughing behind the sink. Honestly I wouldn't change anything, you did a really nice job at pacing the story. Only suggestion- maybe think about a small panel right before that final scene where we see you go underneath the sink to better understand the perspective of the final scene? Let me know if you have any questions!
allison