So I had a dream that I was making a sand castle and in the distance I spot something. It starts to come closer and closer. When it gets to shower its a small little lochness monster. So thats my story
This is really sweet! I like the way you have the panels and the page organized. Good job with your transitions. I would love to see your sand castle a bit more established - maybe you have one tower built and when you spot the mini-monster you are working on a 2nd tower. It will help with clarity and establishing the beach scene. For the final panel, maybe that could be broken up into 2 frames, or utilize a completely different point of view to help with emphasis - maybe it is just one panel but more close up, similar to the first panel. I want to be able to see your character's face when you meet the mini-monster, not just the back of your head. Let me know if you have any questions!
Ashlee -
ReplyDeleteThis is really sweet! I like the way you have the panels and the page organized. Good job with your transitions. I would love to see your sand castle a bit more established - maybe you have one tower built and when you spot the mini-monster you are working on a 2nd tower. It will help with clarity and establishing the beach scene. For the final panel, maybe that could be broken up into 2 frames, or utilize a completely different point of view to help with emphasis - maybe it is just one panel but more close up, similar to the first panel. I want to be able to see your character's face when you meet the mini-monster, not just the back of your head. Let me know if you have any questions!
allison